I value and respect my mother tongue, the Filipino language.
This is what has been taught to me during my first few years of childhood.
However, we face global competitions these days; we must be realistic and must
learn to use the universal language, the English language.
As well all know, foreign investors keep coming to the
Philippines to make big business transactions. If we stick to our language as
medium of instructions there will be miscommunications and we may end up
closing no business deals, at all. Thus, we can’t help boost our country’s
economy.
Our Filipino women are doing great in the international
beauty pageants and I am proud to say, I love to watch our girls, without an
interpreter, answer intelligently questions in straight English with substance,
poise, and confidence.
We are flattering to know that we are one of the leading
countries, all over the world, who speak English so well and it should be an
honor for us.
Thanks for those foreign settlers who lived with us years
ago – and taught us the English language. They were patiently imparting to us
the ABCs and to the Filipino mentors we had long ago, who taught our
countrymen.
I am not saying after all, we will completely forget using
our language. We can still use them especially when we communicate with
countrymen, who are less fortunate, not to know and understood the English
language. Dr. Jose Rizal, our national hero, said “ang hindi magmahal sa sariling wika, ay mahigit pa sa malansang isda.”
It is important for all of us, to love our native language.
We, Filipinos, should
know where and when to use two different languages. It is just a matter of
responsibility.
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ReplyDelete"It is important for all of us, to love our native language."
ReplyDeleteI think, it is unnecessary to put a comma betweet "us" and "to".
Be careful in using punctuation marks especially commas. :)
I wonder, what is your blog's title?
ReplyDelete"We are flattering to know.."
I think it should be, "It is flattering to know"
a long story Anna, maybe on Tuesday I will tell you. :(
Delete"We are flattering to know.." don't you mean "It is flattering to know.."
ReplyDelete"We can still use them especially when we communicate with countrymen, who are less fortunate, not to know and understood the English language." I think this sentence would sound correct and clear if it would be written as "We can still use them especially when we communicate with our less fortunate countrymen, who do not know and understand the English language."
I see that you are having difficulties with tenses. My advice is that you use the same tense throughout your future entries, essays, etc. to avoid tense inconsistencies.
I appreciate your choice of topic. I also noticed that the Filipino language is at times, being regarded as "cheap" which is very disturbing and annoying. It also seems that languages cause discrimination.Languages should serve as bridges, not as barriers. Good job on choosing your topic, Albie!
Angel, that's my Achilles heel. Well-appreciated.
DeleteGood job for applying what you have learn in our past lessons. Just be careful especially in tenses of verbs.
ReplyDeleteThank you Carlo..
DeleteYour first paragraph, for me, was not a very good one. A lot of your sentences did not make sense to me. "We are flattering to know..." What did you mean with that? Should that not be "It is flattering to know..."?
ReplyDeleteYour thoughts were all over, completely jumbled. At first, you were talking about the relation of global competitiveness and the English language. Next, you were talking about beauty pageants and how thankful you were for those who taught our ancestors the English language. I did not like the way you ended it, either. You told your readers that they can still use the Filipino language when talking to those "less fortunate". If I were one of those "less fortunate", I think I would be offended. Who told you they cannot understand English? They may not speak the foreign language fluently but I am quite sure that they can understand you.
Other than not knowing how to express your ideas properly, I think you also have a problem with proper punctuation. To be honest, this untitled post caused me a bit of a headache. No offense, Albie. This is just my opinion.
Camille. thank you for this. I really have a bad background when in comes in English. I declare, English 1 will mold me into a better student.
DeleteI like how you used concrete examples like foreign investors and our Filipina beauties to further emphasize the importance of the English language in our country. Other than the comments above about correct tense usage and the commas, I thought you did a fine job. :)
ReplyDeleteMatthew 5:8 "Blessed are the pure in heart,
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"Our Filipino women are doing great in the international beauty pageants and I am proud to say, I love to watch our girls, without an interpreter, answer intelligently questions in straight English with substance, poise, and confidence."
ReplyDeleteI think this paragraph could benefit with some revisions such as, removing the article "the" before "international beauty pageants" since you do not identify any particular pageant; "I love to watch our girls" this phrase sounds inappropriate you could change it into "I love to watch our delegates" because I think "girls" as a word is improper for referring ladies representing a particular country; I also think you should separate the last part into a sentence since "without an interpreter" sounds out of place after " I love to watch our girls" it could be better this way "They answer intelligently questions in fluent English with substance, poise, and confidence without the need of an interpreter.
"Thanks for those foreign settlers who lived with us years ago – and taught us the English language."
I think you should specify the Americans as the foreign settlers since they are the only ones who imparted us the English language.
All in all I find this blog interesting and congratulations for coming up with such an idea.
Be careful with your word choice, like in this sentence "I love to watch our girls" I think the word "girls" in this sentence is not appropriate. Another thing is always be mindful of the punctuation marks :)
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of your post, knowing the importance of the English language and at the same time loving our own.
ReplyDelete"..answer intelligently questions in straight English with substance, poise, and confidence." I think that this would be better in this way: "..answer questions intelligently in straight English with substance, poise, and confidence."
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ReplyDeleteI agree with Joie, I think your structure as a whole is like a place where a destructive typhoon brought total havoc. It is like a computer that has so many files that needs a clean-up.
ReplyDeleteYour topic is nice but you miserably failed to unite the thoughts because it seems that your ideas are at war; also I find that your ideas are biased in terms of the "unfortunate ones". I also think that the reason why you failed is that you did not narrow down your topics to a more concise and understandable one.
Moreover, I think your word-bank is like a half-completed box that needs to be filled with bigger and purposeful words so that you can have a wide range of choices when writing a scholarly blog.
May I also remind you to be careful with your use of punctuation marks because as we all know the use of too much would result to cryptic sentences. While the use of too little amount of punctuation marks you would surely end up with the same fate.
Lastly, I think you should practice your writing technique because it is similar to a skill that needs to be practiced; moreover, I recommend that you must learn to pour out your own personality in your written art so that when read your work would be unique and memorable at the same time.
This comment is not to offend you because as your friends I think it is our obligation to help you in anyway we can so that you could be proficient in the use of the English language.
Your topic is good but it seems you're having a hard time in expressing your thoughts. Just practice. Anyway, I still got your point Kuya Albie. :)
ReplyDeleteHi Albie! That was a great opinion on the usage of the English and the Filipino language. Foreigners are constantly visiting our country and some are even establishing businesses here, that is why it is really important to learn how to speak the English language.
ReplyDeleteThe last statement you wrote, "We, Filipinos, should know where and when to use two different languages. It is just a matter of responsibility", was a brilliant way to end your post. It summarized your whole idea. It was short, simple, and straight to the point.
However, there are some things I want to correct. You wrote, "We are flattering to know that we are one of the leading countries, all over the world, who speak English so well and it should be an honor for us." It should be It is flattering to know or We are flattered to know. Also, I think that it would be better if you omit the phrase, "all over the world" because it sounds redundant. You already mentioned countries so it is understood that these countries are from all over the world.
You also wrote, "Thanks for those foreign settlers who lived with us years ago". The preposition for should be replaced with the preposition to.
"They were patiently imparting to us the ABCs and to the Filipino mentors we had long ago, who taught our countrymen." I am confused as to what you're trying to mean. Are you also thanking the "Filipino mentors"?
"They were patiently imparting" should be "They patiently imparted" since it already happened.
You also wrote, "We can still use them especially when we communicate with countrymen, who are less fortunate, not to know and understood the English language." I suggest to omit the comma after countrymen because it is unnecessary. Also, "not to know and understood the English language" should be written as "who do not know and understand the English language".
Lastly, I want to point out that the comma in the sentence, "It is important for all of us, to love our native language." should be omitted.
I believe that title is somewhat important because it helps you to catch your readers' interest and will give them an idea of what your entry is all about. At the beginning of your post, I found it hard to determine what you really wanted to say not only because you lack title, but also your introduction is not that captivating. Another thing is, learn how to express your thoughts in a systematic way. If you have different ideas about a certain topic, you may use transitions so that your thoughts will still be connected and your readers won't be confused of what you really want to tell them. When I was near the end, I was like, "Is this all?" I suggest, try to make your post a little bit longer by giving more instances that show the importance of the English language and by making your conclusion an interesting one. Lastly, correct word choice and use of punctuation marks should also be observed. Be cautious of the words you use because sometimes they address different meanings.
ReplyDeleteNevertheless, I do appreciate what you shared to us. :)
Other than the comments above, there are still some things I want you to fix up.
ReplyDelete"As well all know, foreign investors keep coming to the Philippines to make big business transactions." The word 'well' should be replace with 'we'.
"If we stick to our mother language as medium of instructions there will be miscommunications and we may end up closing no business deals, at all." It is necessary to put a comma between the words'instructions' and 'there'. Furthermore, eliminate the comma between 'deals' and 'at'.
"Thus, we can't help boost our country's economy." Avoid contractions in formal writing. Use 'can not' instead of 'can't'.
Always be reminded of the the following: use of articles, punctuation marks, tenses of verb, word choice, and writing style. Also, the deadline for posting is 8pm of every Saturday, but you posted yours beyond the given time. Be aware of your responsibilities.
I agree with all the comments written above. Just be careful next time and you'll be fine. You have good examples, though :)
ReplyDeleteJust try to be careful with your punctuation marks next time and try to compose a better introduction :)
ReplyDeleteCorrect word choice is the one you need,dude.
ReplyDeleteHey there Albie! I love that your topic is all about Pinoy Pride! I do suggest though, that you be more careful with your sentence structures. But anyway, Congrats! You're done with your post! :D
ReplyDeleteI think I got the point of your topic, however it is quite jumbled. Anyway I think you chose a great topic. :)
ReplyDeleteGood topic. However, you have to be consistent with your tenses and be reminded on your punctuation marks :)
ReplyDeleteI don't want to be rude, but the first half of this entry gave me cancer. Plan the flow of your ideas so that they don't jump out here and there. Also, check your tenses and word choice. Nevertheless, I understood what you are trying to convey. Have a nice day. :)
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DeleteI think our block mates have already pointed out your wrong usage of other words you used on your blog, as well as the lack of your title. I think you must always be mindful of those. I appreciate your examples, though.
ReplyDeleteThank you guys. I pray. I will strive harder for a better writing skills. I know God gave these block mates for me to learn, wouldn't you? Hope you'll join me in my journey! I appreciate all the suggestions, it is a treasure for me. and I know I made a mess. God bless people. For the people who help me post this, Matthew 5:7"Blessed are the merciful,
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I hope it is not yet too late for me. Kuya Albie, I agree with all of them. But always remember that nobody is perfect. Through proper learning and exposure in English language, we can be as proficient as others.
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